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Re: Guix paper
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Nikita Karetnikov |
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Re: Guix paper |
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Mon, 18 Mar 2013 07:48:25 +0400 |
> Although I’m tired of writing right now, I welcome comments. :-)
Nitpicking:
1. I think that it would be better to move the Background heading to
the next page. Here is a possible solution: [1].
2. This document has a lot of hyphenation problems:
- the word "based" on the second page;
- the word "bash" on the second figure;
- (uri "mirror://gnu/hello/hello-2.7.tar.gz") on the fifth page;
- "origin-" on the sixth page;
- "parametrize" on the sixth page;
- "expression->derivation-in-linux-vm" on the seventh page;
- "corresponding" on the seventh page;
- "build-bootstrap-guile.-sh" on the eighth page;
- "build-expression->derivation" on the eighth page;
- "GNU Guix" on the eighth page.
Possible solutions:
- the "microtype" package [2];
- use a single column instead of two;
- the "hyphenation" command [3].
3. Use the "hypcap" option [4].
4. Typos:
- "Two values are turned" (on the third page) should probably
say: "Two values are returned."
- "Allows for" (on the sixth page); "for" should be removed.
- This one: "First, some GNU/Linux" (page 8) lacks the word
"distributions."
- "The" is probably missing here: "Ways to achieve this are
known..."
- Remove unnecessary spaces (page 10): "Store --- a system..."
5. Non-breaking space: [5].
Examples:
- "Figure 4" on the sixth and seventh pages;
- "Section 3.4" on the ninth page.
6. Maybe it would be better not to use underline on the third figure
[6].
7. I think that the word "hello" (on the third page) should be
emphasized with the "texttt" command, not quotation marks. I also
think that the comma should go before the closing quotation mark.
But this rule depends on the dialect.
[1] http://tex.stackexchange.com/questions/9576/how-to-avoid-heading-orphan
[2] http://stackoverflow.com/questions/1609837/latex-breaking-up-too-many-words
[3] https://en.wikibooks.org/wiki/LaTeX/Text_Formatting#Hyphenation
[4]
https://en.wikibooks.org/wiki/LaTeX/Labels_and_Cross-referencing#Issues_with_links_to_tables_and_figures_handled_by_hyperref
[5]
http://tex.stackexchange.com/questions/15547/when-should-i-use-non-breaking-space
[6] https://en.wikibooks.org/wiki/LaTeX/FAQ#Forget_about_bold_and_underline
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