On 20/06/2008, Tim Dobson <address@hidden> wrote:
MJ Ray wrote:
The "but also..." phrase seems a little stilted to me but I can't
quite identify the reason. I also dislike passive expressions and
long sentences. I suggest rewording to:-
Manchester Free Software serves a growing apparent need for a group
based in the Manchester area that focuses primarily on free software
and GNU/Linux. It also covers topics which impact on the freedoms of
computer users, such as Digital Restrictions Management.
I would prefer switching "but also..." to "and also..."
I'd prefer to keep it as ". It also", otherwise it's one very long sentence..