Re: GNUstep.org page consistency...

[Scott Stevenson]

On Feb 5, 2004, at 3:30 PM, Alex Perez wrote:

> 2. I don't want to offend whoever wrote them, but the "About GNUstep" 
> and
> "Mission Statement" pages feel weird to read...it sounds like someone 
> is
> having a conversation with you, and seems way too casual of a way to
> convey this information.
I largely agree with this. There are pros and cons to formality. You 
can obviously go too far in either direction -- too stuffy on one side, 
too chatty on the other.
I think the biggest issue in the "about" section is that the 
conversation format makes it hard to scan quickly. The main offender is 
probably the first paragraph, where GNUstep is defined as several 
different things.  :)
Maybe something like:

	GNUstep is a cross-platform, open source development toolkit that is 
centered
	around the OpenStep API originally created by NeXT (now Apple 
Computer, Inc).
	The development environment consists of development tools, 
object-oriented
	frameworks and leverages the Objective-C language support built into 
the
        standard distribution of gcc.

And then continue on into the stuff about Cocoa in a similar voice. 
Just throwing suggestions out here.

> rewording it in a slightly more professional/distanced manner.
Just an extra perspective on this -- while the 'distanced' voice tends 
to command more respect, I think you can actually lose contact with the 
reader if you go too high up on mount olympus.  :)
Again, just thinking out loud.


   - Scott

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